blog 10 "Peer Reviews"

Reviewing e-waste by Anallely Mendez:

Does the draft have a main point (thesis)?

“The electronic waste from the U.S is affecting the people from other nations, especially China since here is where most of our e-waste lands in”

Find an instance of what you consider an interesting or useful example, image, chart, etc. and explain why.

What I found interesting is in the last paragraph on page 4 when she states “Workers in Guiyu get paid only $1.50 per day”. I found that crazy that they get paid so little to handle these toxic products. With that salary they can’t even afford proper protecting gear to help them from being exposed from these substances.

Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why.

Well I don’t find nothing confusing or boring about the topic since in doing the same one J but I will just like to point out the only thing I can say that is wrong with the paper is there too many photo’s. I remember the professor stating photos aren’t count as apart of the paper but can be added on. And on just page 6 alone their two photos and one paragraph. I don’t know if that is counted as a page….

Does the draft acknowledge where information comes from IN THE BODY OF THE TEXT?

Yes I think the citation was done properly.

If the draft has a fictional "human interest story," discuss whether it is convincing/imaginative/detailed or forced/tedious/general.

Yes I think the draft was convincing it had a lot of important detail and stated how important recycling e-waste is and the consequences of e-waste. It kept my interested and I like the fact that I was used as an example in the paper. Ha ha that was funny.

Would you recommend that the writer get some help with grammar before turning in the last draft? Why? Why not?

Well I think everyone can use help in grammar no one is that good, but their was minor errors I spotted like in paragraph 1 she forgot to indent the 1st paragraph. But the trick I use is read it out loud to your self that’s how you can spot errors. And also Microsoft word’s spell and grammar check is helpful as well……


Reviewing the Amazon rainforest by Alejandro Andrade:

Does the draft have a main point (thesis)?

“This paper aims to report the social and environmental significance of the destruction of the Amazonian rainforest”

Find an instance of what you consider an interesting or useful example, image, chart, etc. and explain why.

I like the examples he pointed out with the issues were facing and how were trying to go green but were struggling to get there. That I believe is so true.

Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why.

Not having much of a first draft I think what he has so far is very good I understand everything he saying and I really like the examples used it kept me thinking and wanting to read more

Does the draft acknowledge where information comes from IN THE BODY OF THE TEXT?

Yes I think the citation was done properly.

If the draft has a fictional "human interest story," discuss whether it is convincing/imaginative/detailed or forced/tedious/general.

Yes I think the draft was convincing it had a good argument.

Would you recommend that the writer get some help with grammar before turning in the last draft? Why? Why not?

Well like I stated in my other review I think everyone can use help in grammar no one is that good, the trick I use is read it out loud to your self that’s how you can spot errors. And also Microsoft word’s spell and grammar check is helpful as well……