blog 10 "Peer Reviews"

Reviewing e-waste by Anallely Mendez:

Does the draft have a main point (thesis)?

“The electronic waste from the U.S is affecting the people from other nations, especially China since here is where most of our e-waste lands in”

Find an instance of what you consider an interesting or useful example, image, chart, etc. and explain why.

What I found interesting is in the last paragraph on page 4 when she states “Workers in Guiyu get paid only $1.50 per day”. I found that crazy that they get paid so little to handle these toxic products. With that salary they can’t even afford proper protecting gear to help them from being exposed from these substances.

Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why.

Well I don’t find nothing confusing or boring about the topic since in doing the same one J but I will just like to point out the only thing I can say that is wrong with the paper is there too many photo’s. I remember the professor stating photos aren’t count as apart of the paper but can be added on. And on just page 6 alone their two photos and one paragraph. I don’t know if that is counted as a page….

Does the draft acknowledge where information comes from IN THE BODY OF THE TEXT?

Yes I think the citation was done properly.

If the draft has a fictional "human interest story," discuss whether it is convincing/imaginative/detailed or forced/tedious/general.

Yes I think the draft was convincing it had a lot of important detail and stated how important recycling e-waste is and the consequences of e-waste. It kept my interested and I like the fact that I was used as an example in the paper. Ha ha that was funny.

Would you recommend that the writer get some help with grammar before turning in the last draft? Why? Why not?

Well I think everyone can use help in grammar no one is that good, but their was minor errors I spotted like in paragraph 1 she forgot to indent the 1st paragraph. But the trick I use is read it out loud to your self that’s how you can spot errors. And also Microsoft word’s spell and grammar check is helpful as well……


Reviewing the Amazon rainforest by Alejandro Andrade:

Does the draft have a main point (thesis)?

“This paper aims to report the social and environmental significance of the destruction of the Amazonian rainforest”

Find an instance of what you consider an interesting or useful example, image, chart, etc. and explain why.

I like the examples he pointed out with the issues were facing and how were trying to go green but were struggling to get there. That I believe is so true.

Find a place in the paper that you consider confusing or boring and explain why.

Not having much of a first draft I think what he has so far is very good I understand everything he saying and I really like the examples used it kept me thinking and wanting to read more

Does the draft acknowledge where information comes from IN THE BODY OF THE TEXT?

Yes I think the citation was done properly.

If the draft has a fictional "human interest story," discuss whether it is convincing/imaginative/detailed or forced/tedious/general.

Yes I think the draft was convincing it had a good argument.

Would you recommend that the writer get some help with grammar before turning in the last draft? Why? Why not?

Well like I stated in my other review I think everyone can use help in grammar no one is that good, the trick I use is read it out loud to your self that’s how you can spot errors. And also Microsoft word’s spell and grammar check is helpful as well……

open topic

Well open topic so many things to say so little time so I am going to keep it short and sweet. I changed my topic over and over again for many reasons. It was either because I couldn’t find enough information or because it wasn’t that interesting to me. I wanted to pick a topic that was interesting to me because if I am writing something boring and I hated reading it how would I expect for my audience to want to be interested in reading it.

I chose to write about e-waste because me being an electronic freak maybe I can understand and learn more about how bad e-waste is. I mean come on I have 3 laptops, 1 desktop, 1 digital camera, 3 cell phones, 2 printers, a pda, 3 portable gaming systems, over 300 DVDs and I can go on and on. Yes people I know I have a problem, I am a consumer with a fetish for electronics.

Maybe by the end of my paper I can understand that their is just too much e-waste in this world and maybe I can help by not contributing to the problem. I mean come on, who needs 3 laptops I only have 2 hands unless I am a octopus which I don’t think I am lol.

So if any of you guys find good information about e-waste feel free to send it to me at diameana2006@tmail.com i know ya are busy with ya own paper but just if ya come across it. I would really appreciate it…..:)

My final topic!!!!!!!!!

Ok people I narrowed it down and finally decided what I wanted to write about. I still kept it in the category of pollution but I just got more specific. The topic I chose is the toxic waste that was being dumped on the costal line in Somalia, Africa.
It wasn’t bad enough other countries was dumping there waste there but on December 26, 2004, when the Indian Ocean had a Tsunami, the tidal waves pushed all the toxic waste into the drinking supply and soil where the people grow their crops and many of the Somalia’s people became very ill and some even died because of it.
The reason I am writing on this topic is because it goes to show where the waste of other countries goes. Before I did this research I never knew this. How could people do this!, Dumping their waste on other counties and even a 3rd world country no less. Its bad enough they deal with poverty and diseases but now they have to deal with there precious home being treated as someone else’s dumpster. You don’t see them dumping toxic waste in the wealthy country’s like Europe or the great United States. Well their dumping in the U.S but in the poor areas, pretty ironic huh.
I think my paper will be interesting to all because I am sure not many people know of the horrible things going on to these poor countries.
I have an article based on a report from United Nations Environmental Programme (UNEP). As well as many articles and newspaper articles so far and I will try to find more information including photos, interviews and even a video clip of the waste being dumped that would be really good for my report.
I think my main point will be the affects of dumping toxic waste on this country and how the Tsunami helped play the part in not just destroying some of Africa’s land but the horrific effects it had on so many innocent people lives.

Blog 7 (my research paper)

The reason I chose my topic is that it does not affect only the environment it affects all people, animals, and plants. The topic I chose for my research paper is pollution. Pollution comes in different forms. It comes in air, water and land.

Chemical substances being release in the air cause Air pollution. Water pollution is cause by human activity dumping trash and toxic waste into the oceans, lakes and rivers. In addition, Land pollution is contamination of land surface and soil of Earth.

I think all who cares about the environment would want to learn more and would want to read my paper because my paper will have all they need to know about the three major types of pollution.

My paper will be useful to all because I will get down and dirty, and expose all those who are responsible for polluting the earth.

Here are three annotated sources I will include in my paper:
www.lbl.gov/education/ELSI/pollution-main.html. This website has great basic info on air pollution.
www.umich.edu/~gs265/society/waterpollution.htm. This website has lots of info on water pollution including graphs, photos and diagrams.
http://www.buzzle.com/articles/land-pollution.html. This website has great info on land pollution. This article has a lot of good information I can use in my paper.

Blog 6

MY REFLECTION

To me reflection means to recollect thoughts and memory from the past and see where it meets you in the present state. When I first attend this class I though oh boy another boring class with boring topics and I have to write like 10 papers. And when I found out about what the class assignments is based on I thought to myself ok the environment, trees, the sky and the earth.

But then when I saw the movie “An inconvenience truth” I was like wow where have I been when all of this was going on. Being trapped in a fantasy world all I cared about was what new outfit I was going to buy when I got paid. Not knowing all this issues that are happening around me and me one of many who was contributing to the problems.

Attending this class opened my eyes to all that I didn’t feel was important or thought wasn’t an issue. I know now how bad global warming is becoming and if we don’t change our ways and priorities we won’t have a future or even our children’s wont have a future because we won’t have a place to call home (our mother earth).

Now that I know all that I know I have decided to be apart of the solution instead of the problem I will do all that I can to help control pollution, global warming, ect. When I tell people about the issues I learned about global warming they all say well even if I want to help what could I do I am just one person, and I tell them even though your one person your still a voice and as a voice you can spread all your knowledge to others and help them become a voice and it will spread from one person to millions.

One person may not do much but millions can, and unless you spread the word know one will wake up out there fantasy world and realize there is more important things in this world besides when the next sale going to be.

There always room in one’s life to add new things, and helping save our planet can always be apart of ones agenda, even if its something small like turning off the lights when not needed or opening the window in the summer instead of living in a.c all day. Little things matter too and we all must realize that.

Wanna Join The Effort

Here A link to a pitition if you want to help you will FILL IT OUT....:)

http://salsa.democracyinaction.org/o/1807/t/5340/petition.jsp?petition_KEY=858

Blog 5

#1The Sustainable Cities Blog

The CUNY Institute for sustainable cities is a blog to get the attention of CUNY students and all who willing to continue leadership in major issues like global warming and economic issues. I like this website because it’s a website with good information on up to date news.

#2Gristmill

The Grist is a blog with news about the environment as well as other information. I can say they have a lot of links to lots of information for all kinds of ideas and issues. I like the comments posted on this blog the people make a lot of sense.

#3Green as a thirst

I really like this blog Vanessa had the will power to do what most of us couldn’t do she stood by what she set out to do and she completed it and I really like how she pointed out one of her reasons for going green was the issue with the polar bears drowning, she stood up for the polar bears J

#4No Impact Man

Ok the only think I can say I like about this blog is the photograph. The links are too light I have to squint to read then and his blog isn’t really interestingL

#5Eco-Geek

I like this blog. It shows the connection between the issues and technology. I can say I’m a geek, so reading this blog was helpful. I love the article in “Carectomy Week in Review” the picture about lady liberty was so funny I couldn’t stop looking at it. :-D I will leave a comment on his blog.